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UPDATE 4/7/06- Made the jump and fall faster!

Here's the new revised version, a week and two days later.

To get a grip on where I'm going with this, I decided I would crit myself before anyone else does. So here's a list of everything I can say about this piece. Keep in mind that while the original file was set to play at 30 fps, the computer automatically set it to play a bit slower than that.

PROS-
- Great sense of flow and good sense of what the character's feeling and his actions. Good personality shown throughout.
- Good overall form.
- Fly's movements are fine. Just jerky enough.

CONS-
- Follow-through of hair and clothing is too quick and jerky. I discovered that secondary actions take just as much time to move as the primary action.
- Sam's head fluxuates in size. In the first shot, when he is leaning back, it could be said that his head is smaller because of perspective, but I think that is pushing it.
- Sam's arms seem to loose and gain fat.
- Sam appears to have a severe case of Man Boobie, especially in the first shot.
- Lines are generally vibrating. This is something I need to practice working on, as I am not a good draftsman, and 2D animators don't usually focus on the line quality anyway.
- Pauses are too abrupt, fly keeps stopping when Sam stops.
- Fall may still be a bit too slow.
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:iconjuanpablojimenez:
JuanPabloJimenez Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
incredible, very fluid and pretey, you really got talent
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:iconthe-dessins:
the-dessins Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
amazing, i dream to make an animation like that!!!
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sandaasu-fox Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2009
Amazing!!
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:iconthe-real-ronin-x:
the-real-ronin-X Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2008  Professional General Artist
GREAT JOB, MAN!
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:iconmaidenoftheforest:
MaidenOfTheForest Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2007
haha, this is adorable ^w^
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wadifahtook Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2007
Wow, consider me blown away. I hope to learn to animate someday, and would kill to be able to do something of this quality. I love the sharp and attractive style.
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:iconi-love-sesshomaru-90:
OMG YOUR REALLY GOOD!!
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rukiaprincess Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
This is VERY intense...Rarely do I ever set eyes on good 2D animation here on dA. I have to tell you, and I don't think I can say it enough, you really inspire me. Way back when I had my hopes set on getting into 2D Disney animation, until they closed up shop in that area. Now, I feel like I don't have a direction anymore. Seeing your animation, how it flows, and how it feels over all just restores that drive in me. I see that there still is hope, and I would love to pursue that again. Thank you for inspiring me to head towards what I love.

Beautiful animation, by the way! Your character designs are supreme. The movement is a bit...jittery, but you already pointed out that fact. It's still great work...!
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andrewk Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2007
Hey there! :)

Thanks, you really make me feel better about all the bad crits this has been getting. One of the most notorious came from a middle-aged British animation professional on a forum. :P
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nocturnalbob Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2007
was that adam ? bless yeah hes just as tough on his students ... believe me heehee! but its usually very useful. you just take in what he's said filter out the harsh ness and remember it for future.
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